Friday, September 17, 2010

Romance, Young Love, and Books

I'm thinking romance. The early stages that is. You know, the first loaded looks that hint at simmering feelings, the shy almost burning first touches when fingers meet fingers, and the heady, soaring emotions that wipe away fear. Young love.

Why am I thinking this? Well, it's not because I'm young, that's for sure. My hubby and I are celebrating our eighteenth anniversary tomorrow. See, so not young. Yikes. But I was young once. And I have a good memory.

And, I'm working on a romance scene in my WIP. It's challenging and fun. Struggling to find a way to express those first racing moments without sounding cliche and cheesy is frustrating. I delete more than I leave, and find myself turning to other books (and movies) for insight.

Here is a delicious example from Carol Lynch William's The Chosen One:



"But. Here is another secret. Another sin. Because I am not allowed to be with Joshua. I am not allowed to feel this way. Tingly when he looks at me. Weak when his hand is near mine. And the worst part--I couldn't help but wonder how it would be to kiss him.

And when we did kiss, it was all my fault.

Emily in the corner with her baby doll.

Me, in the Fellowship Hall with Joshua.

On the piano bench.

Smelling the soap he uses.

Watching his hands.

Hardly thinking of music.

...I glanced in his direction and saw him looking at me. Not at the piano keys.

"Put your hand like this," I told him. "You have to look here." I tapped the keyboard.

He let me move his fingers to the right position. So warm, those fingers.

"The C and E and G," I said.

But Joshua's hand didn't stay where I put it. Instead his fingers tangled up with mine. The whole side of his body leaned into me. His other arm slid around my waist.

"You can't play the piano holding my hand. Or leaning crooked like that, either," I said, my voice breathy. The words almost didn't come out of my mouth. But I thought, I could kiss you right now and go to hell and it would be worth it. Worth it.

...And then I kissed him. Just fell into him right in the middle of a sentence. Pressed my lips to his. So soft. Then he was kissing me back. And I didn't even know how to kiss, had never kissed anyone in my life but my family, and then only little pecks on the cheek.

It felt like Joshua sucked the breath from me, there on the piano bench, with all the thoughts of sin going through my head, but me not caring at all. Not at all.

"I better go," I said, when I finally pushed away from him. My hands trembled. My knees shook.

And he said, "Don't be scared, Kyra. I'm right here."


Isn't that scrumptious?

What is your favorite first love scene? Me? I'm off to create my own.

6 comments:

Jolene Perry said...

I am so buying that book

L.T. Elliot said...

That is an excellent scene. I loved what she said about falling right in the middle of a sentence.

Happy writing!

LeishaMaw said...

Jolene, The Chosen One is wonderful, sad, and beautiful all at once. It's one of my favorites. Enjoy.

L.T., isn't it good? Yeah, some day maybe I'll grow up and get good, too. Sigh.

Irene B. Gardner said...

Aaaahhhh, Leisha, ya really got me going there for a minute. You are just crazy/wonderful with a terrific sense of humor. I think that's why I enjoy your work so much. Keep it rolling. You've got what it takes.

I don't know if I think young love or old love is the best. I'm still working on it. (giggle)

Jonene Ficklin said...

That was a great scene and carried you through the book. Writing the hope, anticipation, and first touch is almost as terrifying/exhilirating as the real thing. You're doing great. I loved your sword fight/first touch with Trin! Love to see you post that and can't wait for more.

LeishaMaw said...

Irene, you are such a sweetie. Hugs.

Jonene, isn't it the truth? I finished the scene and Hubby thought it was too long. Sigh. Now, I'm left wondering if that's because he's a man and I'm not. Hmmmm.

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